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#口语喵第 23 期 Day 5# disagree
1 people can live without them
2 society can go on without them

To be honest, I disagree with the statement.
Firstly, people can live without paintings and musics. Many people seldom listen to music and have never visited art exhibitions at all, but they still have good lives. A lot of activities can be used to occupy their leisure time, such as reading books, climbing hills and so on.
Secondly, Artists and musicians only exist in prosperous societies. If whole social economy is poor, for example in war years, people have no extra money to pay for them, but society still run.
Although Arts and musics make people's life colorful, but are not necessities. So I think they are not important to the society.
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2016-11-11 23:51:43 来自 口语喵
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哈哈哈~这个不错,没有艺术和音乐地球照转
2016-11-12 00:13
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To be honest, I disagree with the statement. Firstly, people can live without paintings and musics. Many people seldom listen to music and have never visited art exhibitions at all, but they still CAN ENJOY THEIR good lives. A lot of activities CAN/COULD随意[can be used to] occupy their leisure time, such as reading books, HIKING and DIRTBIKING. Secondly, THE EXISTENCE OF ARTISTS OR MUSICIANS DEPENDS ON HOW PROSPEROUS THE SOCIETY IS. If SOCIAL ECONOMY IN ONE COUNTRY is poor, SAY THOSE IN WAR ZONES, people have EVEN NO MONEY OR TIME TO ENJOY THEN BECAUSE THE PRIORITY FOR THEM IS TO SURVIVE. Although Arts and musics make people's life colorful, BUT IT DOESN'T MEAN WE COULD NOT LIVE WITHOUT THEM. So I think they are not THAT important to the society.
2016-11-14 10:24
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点评全在修改完成的文章里了 自行比照一下吧 希望对你有帮助
2016-11-14 10:25
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4 楼
评论 2楼逻辑和句式一下子顺畅和丰富好多!继续努力!
2016-11-14 10:47
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评论 2楼 太感谢啦!
2016-11-14 10:48
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