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#口语喵第 36 期 Day 5# I totally agree with the idea that online courses influence us greatly
first,The schedule of online courses are free
Say if I wanna learn Spanish and my university has a schedule every night starting at 6 in room 302. I cannot afford all my off-school-hours-at-6pm on that. If I get an online course, I could watch it anytime I want.
Also, the content of online courses is more attractive to viewers.
During offline classes, if the teacher's instruction is boring , we could do nothing but force ourselves to listen, the experience will be bad. But if we listen to online courses, we could listen to those teachers that fits our style.
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2017-12-08 10:41:45 来自 口语喵
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I totally agree with the idea that online courses influence us greatly
first,The schedule of online courses are free  (schedule 是免费的? 还是表达online courses are free ?语法)
Say if I wanna learn Spanish and my university has a schedule every night starting at 6 in room 302. I cannot afford all my off-school-hours-at-6pm on that. If I get an online course, I could watch it anytime I want.
 (这个例子的逻辑再捋一下,eg.我们学校有这样的课程, 我想学,但是不能保证出勤率,然而在线课程的灵活性可以补充我的时间空缺安排. 句子中的连接词适当用起来)
Also, the content of online courses is more attractive to viewers.
During offline classes, if the teacher's instruction is boring, we could do nothing but force ourselves to listen, the experience will be bad. But if we listen to online courses, we could listen to those teachers that fits our style. 
 (基于这个理由,可以直白表达: 网课形式多样化(的选择不同老师不同教学风格可供选择)比传统面授课程(一枝独秀)占优势,更吸引人。) 
But if we listen to online courses, we could listen to those teachers that fits our style.
这一句转换成网课多样化的选择应该表达更准确一些, 文中选择老师还是课程内容, 我有点小懵逼?前面说的是content 吸引人, 后面是选择适合自己范的老师。

整个框架还是很好的, 观点,理由, 例子。

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