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托福作文咩第 29 期 Day 3
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#托福作文咩第 29 期 Day 3# Of course, I am not saying that there is no merit for reading books. In the contrast, reading the original could be a good to learn about the thought of write. In the most cases, the film derector will adapt book's content in order to have a better effect or coordinate to real situation. To some extent, the story of movie sometimes are not loyal to the content of original book anymore. However, I think, most people only care about weather the story of movie is wonderful, since they spend their time and money just in order to have a break. Therefore, the debate of which deserves appriciation most dose not make sense. 10分钟,113字
2017-12-06 12:56:42 来自 托福作文咩
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Of course, I am not saying that there is no merit for reading books. In the contrast, reading the original could be a good way to learn about the thought of writer. In the most cases, the film derector will adapt book's content in order to have a better effect or coordinate to real situation. To some extent, the story of movie sometimes are not loyal to the content of original book anymore. However, I think, most people only care about weather the story of movie is wonderful, since they spend their time and money just in order to have a break. Therefore, the debate of which deserves appriciation most dose not make sense. 10分钟,114字   这个是正版~
2017-12-06 12:58
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1. 最后一句话最好是支撑你的主论点,也就是 ‘先看电影更好’。否则就跑题了。
2. 让步段可以重申前两段的理由更重要,然后就转折回来了。
3. 个人觉得,however 后面的内容应该比前面的多,可能更好一些
Of course, I am not saying that there is no merit for reading books. In the contrast, [In contrast] reading the original could be a good way to learn about the thought of writer. In the most cases, the film derector [director] will adapt book's content in order to have a better effect or coordinate to real situation. To some extent, the story of movie sometimes are not loyal [loyal 好像不能这么用,用consistent?] to the content of original book anymore. However, I think, most people only care about weather[whether] the story of movie is wonderful, since they spend their time and money just in order to have a break. Therefore, the debate of which deserves appriciation[appreciation] most dose[does] not make sense.

or coordinate to real situation 没有读懂。。。。再调整下吧
2017-12-06 15:12
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