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#口语喵第 36 期 Day 1# To answer this question, risking being blamed by my roommate, a pet–lover, Huang Ran, my position is negative.
First, to take golden fish for example, it has been scientifically reported that their eyes would be seriously hurt when they are unconsciously knocking against the water tank especially when they are kept in ones without adequate space. Therefore, since you cannot build a comfortable condition for them, you are kind of like killing them.
Oh, well, pet dog suddenly strikes to me, but can you imagine? You are about to have a sweet rest, and at the same time, there is a barking dog.
In a word, keeping pet can be both cruel to those lovely creatures and your lovely roommates. So, keeping pet shouldn't be allowed in the dormitory.
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2017-12-04 12:02:36 来自 口语喵
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1. 语言/语法
语言有一定的多样性;
... risking being blamed by my roommate, a pet–lover, Huang Ran, my position is negative.
这里感觉有点混乱。
... First, to take golden fish for example
first? firstly?
Therefore, since you cannot build a comfortable condition for them, you are kind of like killing them.
you are kind of like ???
这几个地方不是很确定,是否太口语化
2. 语音
语音可以稍微慢一点,可以练一下精听里面的跟读训练,模仿;

3. 逻辑
逻辑清晰;

4. 建议
2017-12-07 16:33
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