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#口语喵第 35 期 Day 8# I enjoy going finishing with my family when I were a child. Since we live near the sea, fishing is popular in my hometown. We just fishing with a regular rod and reel, it’s a matter of finding the right bait. My father taught me to use earthworms to catch fish and it worked effectively. After that, it’s just trial, error and a great deal of patience. My mother always takes cameras to provide a memento of our catches, which is my most memorable part. After caught enough fish we can go home to do some fish cooking. Hence, fishing is my most enjoyable family activity.
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2017-11-08 12:26:13 来自 口语喵
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语音方面:
语速可以,语音语调也不错。
需要学习发音规则以及一些单词的音准需要提高。

逻辑素材:
逻辑素材也可以,文中用来具体的事情以及细节支持自己的观点。

语言方面:
1. 时态问题需要注意。整篇文章应该用过去时态。
I enjoyed going finishing with my family when I was a child.
2. 啰嗦
My father taught me to use earthworms to catch fish and it worked effectively.
My father taught me how to use earthworms to catch fish and finally it worked.
3. 句与句之间缺少逻辑连词或者逻辑顺序词。
After that, it’s just trial, error and a great deal of patience.
After that, what I needed to do were trials and a great deal of patience.
After caught enough fish we can go home to do some fish cooking.
After catching enough fishes, we went home to do some fish cooking, enjoying our whole day’s harvest.
2017-11-08 17:41
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