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#托福作文咩第 28 期 Day 8# 【作业一】
有些人认为现在也有好多利用别人的爱心谋取钱财的报道,导致人们不愿意去帮助陌生人。但是人们只是变得警惕了,而不是不愿意帮助。民间慈善机构可能不容易让人相信,但是主流的慈善机构仍然会收到大量的捐款。这说明人们仍然是愿意帮助别人的。
【作业二】
当前有很多骗子利用人们的爱心诈骗钱财,导致人们变得不再愿意帮助陌生人了。
1. With a great number of cheaters who use people’s benevolence to seek money, people are unwilling to help strangers.
2. People are unwilling to help strangers for a great number of cheaters who use people’s benevolence to make money.
【作业三】
Some people claim that with a great number of cheaters who use people’s benevolence to make money, people are unwilling to help strangers. However, I think this only shows that people become vigilant not unwilling to help strangers. Civilian charities may not easy to believe, but mainstream charities still receive a large amount of donations, which illustrates that people are willing to help strangers.
2017-11-08 09:53:12 来自 托福作文咩
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注意论点是人们比过去更愿意帮助陌生人,注意比较 
句法结构存在错误 
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2017-11-09 11:37
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评论 1 楼: 好的,谢谢老师!
2017-11-09 12:15
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现在的人比以前更愿意帮助陌生人。来自个人的捐款最近几年比前几年更多。越来越多的好人好事被媒体报道。也有人认为,由于当前有很多骗子利用人们的爱心诈骗钱财,导致人们变得不再愿意帮助陌生人了。但是,人们变得有警惕性并不表示人们不愿意帮助别人。当人们找到可靠的慈善组织后,依然会很慷慨地奉献爱心。正如前面的例子中所说,近几年主流慈善机构得到的个人捐款数量逐年大幅上涨。因此,人们是越来越愿意帮助陌生人的。[br]1.With a great number of crooks using people's love to defraud money, people are unwilling to help strangers.[br]2.People are unwilling to help strangers for a great number of crooks using people’s love to defraud.[br]Nowadays people are more willing to help strangers than before. Donations from individuals have been bigger in recent years than in previous years. More and more good people are reported by the media. With a great number of crooks using people's love to defraud money, people are unwilling to help strangers. But people become vigilant, which does not mean that people are reluctant to help others. When people find reliable charity organizations, they will still be generous in their love. As mentioned in the previous example, the number of personal donations received by mainstream charities has increased sharply in recent years. Therefore, people are more and more willing to help strangers.[br]

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