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口语喵第 35 期 Day 3
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#口语喵第 35 期 Day 3# Refering to what pattern will be practiced in future classes, I would like to give preference to the former one, it is going to be common for students to have classes in the Internet. Firstly, due to nowadays database analysis, almost every educational institution enable to produce individual curriculum schedule and gurantee the working process. In addition, following classes in the Internet can save time and money compared with routine methods, students can study at home on mobile devices during spared time instead of going to a real-life classroom. Maybe some others worry about that without a teacher devering a lecture in the front, students may lose the sense of reality. But I want to say, hum, future technology like visiual reality could creat cubical imagines. That's all right, we needn't be suspecious that someday in the future, tehnology will transform all things, just embrace it bravely!
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2017-11-01 16:58:40 来自 口语喵
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1. 逻辑 逻辑线比较清晰,框架很明显
2. 语言
句式、
    refer to是参照、参考的意思,此处你表达的意思是考虑到,应用considering...;
    第一点用了firstly,第二点用secondly比较顺承前文;
    due to nowadays database analysis这句,修改为due to the development of the database analysis nowadays比较顺一些
   on the Internet,不是in
   on the mobile device应改为 with the mobile device
   some others的some需要删掉
   cubical是立方体的意思,并不是三维立体的意思,应换为three-dimensional   
3. 语音
整体流畅,发音请注意一下元音。还有几个比较明显的发音错误
   internet
individual
routine 
   还有thing,注意th是咬舌的音,不是s
4. 建议 总体来说很不错,最后一句话的观点总结句更明显,比如in a word.../my conclusion is that..就完美了
2017-11-01 17:18
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