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#托福作文咩第 28 期 Day 2# 【作业一】
出国旅游一般都是乘坐飞机,往往都会占用一天时间使人非常疲惫。比如,北京飞到纽约最快也要13个半小时。长时间在飞行状态,坐在狭小密闭的空间里,会令人腰酸背痛,产生烦闷。如果身体好的话,实行这种情况的能力便强很多。
【作业二】
出国旅游需要好的身体。因为路途遥远舟车劳顿,十分辛苦,身体好的人适应力强,不容易导致那么疲惫,而且睡一觉就能很快恢复体力。出国旅游一般都是乘坐飞机,往往都会占用一天时间使人非常疲惫。比如,北京飞到纽约最快也要13个半小时。长时间在飞行状态,坐在狭小密闭的空间里,会令人腰酸背痛,产生烦闷。如果身体好的话,适应这种情况的能力便强很多。
【作业三】
请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。
1.Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy and strength.
2.Interesting as it is, travelling abroad will need consumption of energy and strength.
【作业四】
It is necessary to have a vigorous body for travelling abroad. In terms of the long distance, our bodies and spirits suffer a lot. A man who has a strong body is able to adapt to this condition. It is not that easy to make him feel tired, and having a sweet dream is the best way to refresh that kind of people. People usually fly to foreign countries, and it costs the whole day on the way which drains strength very much. For example, it takes 13.5 hours at least to fly to the New York city from Beijing. Body will ache when people are stucked in thier narrow seats for a long time. But if the body is firm enough, there is no doubt to get out of the dilimma easily. Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy and strength. So I insist that travel abroad as soon as possible!
2017-10-31 22:51:45 来自 托福作文咩
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sorry,来晚了,不过这段感觉好像评论过,怎么我的评论不见了,😟不会评到别人作文的底下的了吧(捂脸
1. A man who has a strong body is able to adapt to this condition.这句话出现的有点突兀,可以加个连接词让过渡更自然(e.g.However, Nevertheless, etc.)
2.第3.4句:人称的转换好像出了点问题,就是一开始是a man,到后面又出现了that kind of people,建议统一下人称
3.第5句:“People usually fly to foreign countries...”突然出现在这里会显得有点生硬,因为这里的坐飞机劳累和前面的旅途劳累不是包含关系嘛,所以建议加个连接词过渡一下(e.g.:especially when..., in particular, etc.)
4.第7句:Body will ache这个表达是不是有点怪怪的,身体会疼痛,emmm,我想想,这句换成这样表达好不好:When people are stucked in thier narrow seats for a long time, they will easily get a backache.(用词有点简单
5.第8句:delimma大多数情况下一般指的是“进退两难”的意思,放在这里稍稍有点不太合适
6.哈哈,经常看到段落最后真情的呼吁,很亲切,但建议加1-2个就可以啦,克制一下感情啦😝
7.建议:例子是最好的凑字数利器,如果用个再具体一点的例子(虽然基本靠编),不仅会增加可信度,方便进行论证,也会给人代入感更强哦
 
2017-11-03 23:45
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评论 1 楼: (捂脸)刚发出去今天的作业才看到你的评语,有些问题我只能私下再改了,确实,感觉我的衔接词用的不好,搞得很多都突兀,刚刚规整作文的时候自己都尴尬。嘻嘻嘻谢谢你呀~辛苦啦辛苦啦~
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【作业一、二】[br]出国旅游的前提之一是你的身体要好。毕竟,出国虽然好玩儿,但很耗费体力和精力。年轻人,精力旺盛,他们能够有更多的机会去接触新奇、有趣的事物,与老年人相比。比如,当我的舅舅和姥姥去年去泰国玩的时候,我的舅舅潜水、爬山等玩得很尽兴,而我的姥姥只是坐在岸边,注视着周围的风景。有时她甚至不得不在酒店里待一整天。从这个角度来讲,我坚持这一点当我们还年轻的时候出去旅游要比年老体衰时出去玩更明智。[br]【作业三】[br]1.Although traveling abroad will be of great fun, it will consume strength and energy.[br]2.Interesting as it is, traveling to other countries will need consumption of physical and mental activities.[br]【作业四】[br]One of the preconditions of Traveling to foreign countries is that you are healthy. After all, interesting as it is, traveling abroad will consume strength and energy. Being full of energy, the young may have more chance to embrace exotic and interesting things than the old. For example, when my uncle and my grandmother went to the Thailand last year, my uncle enjoyed diving and climbing,while what my grandma did was just sitting on the beach and watched beautiful scenery around her. Sometimes, she even had to stay in the hotel for the whole day. From the angle, I insist the view that taking a trip abroad when we are still young is wiser than does that while we become old and senile.
1. 去年,我们一家坐飞机去泰国旅游,我的爷爷因为长时间的飞行一直精神不好,大家都在很开心的玩耍,爷爷就只能回酒店休息吃药。[br]2.其次,出国旅游需要好的身体。出国旅游虽然很好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。年轻人的身体素质更棒,年纪大了无法快速适应异地的环境。去年,我们一家坐飞机去泰国旅游,我的爷爷因为长时间的飞行一直精神不好,大家都在很开心的玩耍,爷爷就只能回酒店休息吃药。我自己就挺喜欢尝试那些新鲜的活动,如果年轻时出国可以好好尝试,要是等到五六十岁再出国,恐怕身体难以承受这样的活动,所以我更喜欢年轻的时候出国旅游。[br]3. 1.Although travel abroad be of great fun, it will consume physical power and energy.[br] 2.Interesting as it is, traveling abroad will need consumption of physical power and energy.[br]4.And also, travling abroad need good body base. Interesting as it is, traveling abroad will need consumption of physical power and energy. Younger people has stringer body base but older people doesn't have enough energy to fit in a foreign environment quickly. Last year, our family went traveling to Thailand by air. My grandfather didn't feel really well because of the long-time flying. When everyone were enjoying the foreign culture, my grandfather could just ate some medicine and had a rest. All of us had a great time except my grandfather. I'd like to try those activities which are new to me. If I can't try them when I was young just until I am 50 or 60 years old. My body can't stand these kind of activities. So, I'd prefer traveling abroad when I am young.
【1】有次我带着姥姥姥爷去欧洲玩,首先因为时差和气候差异,他们就很难调整过来身体状态去适应,好几天我们都是在宾馆度过的。除此之外,因为身体条件,一些有趣的极限运动他们也不能参与,姥姥就非常羡慕我现在有机会可以尝试跳伞,潜水。[br]【2】其次,出国旅游需要好的身体。因为旅游本身就是是一件非常消耗体力的事,只有我们有旺盛的精力和好的身体条件我们才可以享受一次美好的出国旅行。有次我带着姥姥姥爷去欧洲玩,首先因为时差和气候差异,他们就很难调整过来身体状态去适应,好几天我们都是在宾馆度过的。除此之外,因为身体条件,一些有趣的极限运动他们也不能参与,姥姥就非常羡慕我现在有机会可以尝试跳伞,潜水。所以说,趁着年轻,我们应多走出国门看看大千世界,因为我们现在还很健康,可以尽情的体验年老之后体验不到的事物。[br]【3】Although traveling abroad is of great fun, it will consume lots of energy and vigor.[br] Interesting as it is, traveling abroad will need consumption of energy and vigor.[br]【4】What's more, traveling abroad requires a good health condition. It's because traveling itself is a stuff accompanied by happiness as well as tiredness. Hence, most of us are able to enjoy traveling abroad only when we are healthy and having abundant of energy. Once I took my grandparents to Europe, although they were excited, I found it too hard for them to regulate their body condition to adapt the special climate and time differences. Unfortunately, we spent several days in the hotel for a rest. Besides, elder people lack of energy and vigor to take part in some extreme spots, while my grandma deeply admire my chance and courage of doing scuba diving and skydiving. So, as is shown to us, we should go abroad and see the world when we are young, there are great chances for us to experience those amazing things which we can't do when we get old.[br]
[br]【作业一】[br]为什么出国旅游需要好的身体,请举出一个相关的例子。[br]大学有个寒假,我和几个小伙伴一起去俄罗斯旅行,看雪。然而在我们在游玩的时候,有个身体较弱的朋友没适应寒冷的天气,着凉了。她在接下的几天只能一直呆在酒店休息,错过了我们的精彩旅程。[br][br]【作业二】[br]请结合观点、理由,以及你写的例子,仿照上述理由段重写一个理由段,说明为什么出国旅游需要好的身体。[br]出国旅行需要好的身体。健康强壮的身体能让我们在出国旅行的时候更好地适应环境变化,让我们更轻松地玩耍。年纪大了就身体比较容易生病,旅行反变成了不愉快的经历。大学有个寒假,我和几个小伙伴一起去俄罗斯旅行,看雪。然而在我们在游玩的时候,有个身体较弱的朋友没适应寒冷的天气,着凉了。她在接下的几天只能一直呆在酒店休息,错过了我们的精彩旅程。所以,出国旅行还是趁着年轻,身体好精力旺盛的时候去会更好。[br][br]【作业三】[br]请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。[br]1.Although A be of great fun, it will consume B and C.[br]Although traveling abroad is of great fun, it will consume plenty of physical strength and mental energy.[br]2.Interesting as it is, A will need consumption of B and C.[br]Interesting as it is, traveling abroad will need consumption of plentiful strength and stamina. [br]【作业四】[br]请将你在作业二中写的理由段翻译成英文。[br]Traveling abroad requires a healthy, strong body. Good body helps us adjust the transfer of environment when taking a trip abroad, making great visiting easier, while the old is more likely to get ill. During a winter holiday in my college, I went go Russia with a couple of my friends for its fantasy snowscape. However, the girl weak in physique had a bad could since the second day of the trip. She had to stay at hotel and had a rest, missing our fabulous travel experience. Therefore, it is better to travel abroad when we are young, the time we have stronger body and energy.
【观点】[br]我更喜欢在年轻的时候出国旅游。[br]【理由】[br]出国旅游需要好的身体。[br]【作业一】[br]为什么出国旅游需要好的身体,请举出一个相关的例子。[br]去年九月全家一起去英国玩,包括在迪拜转机的3小时,我们一共用了17个小时才到达伦敦。到了之后外公外婆用了3天时间才调整好了状态。大多数时间他们都在我们的轮流陪伴下,转了转酒店周围。我们两个周的行程,外公外婆因为身体原因,真正参与游玩的时间大概只有4/5天。[br]【作业二】[br]请结合观点、理由,以及你写的例子,仿照上述理由段重写一个理由段,说明为什么出国旅游需要好的身体。[br]出国旅游旅途花费时间较长,经常还需要倒时差,对身体素质要求比较高。去年九月全家一起去英国玩,包括在迪拜转机的3小时,我们一共用了17个小时才到达伦敦。到了之后外公外婆用了3天时间才调整好了状态,大多数时间他们都在我们的轮流陪伴下,转了转酒店周围。我们两个周的行程,外公外婆因为身体原因,真正参与游玩的时间大概只有4/5天。因为涉及到出国旅游,所以我认为还是年轻的时候去比较好,等到六七十岁之后,我们很难从路途中的疲惫状态中调整过来。与其说是出去旅游,不如说是出去受罪,所以我认为出国旅游应该趁年轻。[br]【作业三】[br]请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。[br]1.Although A be of great fun, it will consume B and C.[br]2.Interesting as it is, A will need consumption of B and C.[br]Although travelling aboard is of great fun, it will consume strengh and energy.[br]Interesting as it is, travelling aboard need consumption of strengh and energy.[br]【作业四】We were still jet lagged[br]请将你在作业二中写的理由段翻译成英文。[br]Although travelling aboard is of great fun, it will consume a long journey time, and it often requires jet lag. It will need depletion of strength and energy. We had a family tour last Sep. to England which cost 17 hours to London including 3 hours transfer time in Dubai. It takes three days for my grandpa and grandma to adjust to jet lag and recover energy. And we take turns accompanying with them during the trip, mostly, they just walk around the hotel. Sincerity, they taken active parts in the journey at US about 4 or 5 days throughout our two weeks trip. For the contributor that travel to foreign countries, I think that you should do this when you still young. Since it will harder for us to stay energy and adjust jet lag with age. As to a better travel experience, I prefer to travel aboard when I am young.

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