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#托福作文咩第 28 期 Day 2# 【作业一】
出国旅游一般都是乘坐飞机,往往都会占用一天时间使人非常疲惫。比如,北京飞到纽约最快也要13个半小时。长时间在飞行状态,坐在狭小密闭的空间里,会令人腰酸背痛,产生烦闷。如果身体好的话,实行这种情况的能力便强很多。
【作业二】
出国旅游需要好的身体。因为路途遥远舟车劳顿,十分辛苦,身体好的人适应力强,不容易导致那么疲惫,而且睡一觉就能很快恢复体力。出国旅游一般都是乘坐飞机,往往都会占用一天时间使人非常疲惫。比如,北京飞到纽约最快也要13个半小时。长时间在飞行状态,坐在狭小密闭的空间里,会令人腰酸背痛,产生烦闷。如果身体好的话,适应这种情况的能力便强很多。
【作业三】
请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。
1.Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy and strength.
2.Interesting as it is, travelling abroad will need consumption of energy and strength.
【作业四】
It is necessary to have a vigorous body for travelling abroad. In terms of the long distance, our bodies and spirits suffer a lot. A man who has a strong body is able to adapt to this condition. It is not that easy to make him feel tired, and having a sweet dream is the best way to refresh that kind of people. People usually fly to foreign countries, and it costs the whole day on the way which drains strength very much. For example, it takes 13.5 hours at least to fly to the New York city from Beijing. Body will ache when people are stucked in thier narrow seats for a long time. But if the body is firm enough, there is no doubt to get out of the dilimma easily. Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy and strength. So I insist that travel abroad as soon as possible!
2017-10-31 22:51:45 来自 托福作文咩
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sorry,来晚了,不过这段感觉好像评论过,怎么我的评论不见了,😟不会评到别人作文的底下的了吧(捂脸
1. A man who has a strong body is able to adapt to this condition.这句话出现的有点突兀,可以加个连接词让过渡更自然(e.g.However, Nevertheless, etc.)
2.第3.4句:人称的转换好像出了点问题,就是一开始是a man,到后面又出现了that kind of people,建议统一下人称
3.第5句:“People usually fly to foreign countries...”突然出现在这里会显得有点生硬,因为这里的坐飞机劳累和前面的旅途劳累不是包含关系嘛,所以建议加个连接词过渡一下(e.g.:especially when..., in particular, etc.)
4.第7句:Body will ache这个表达是不是有点怪怪的,身体会疼痛,emmm,我想想,这句换成这样表达好不好:When people are stucked in thier narrow seats for a long time, they will easily get a backache.(用词有点简单
5.第8句:delimma大多数情况下一般指的是“进退两难”的意思,放在这里稍稍有点不太合适
6.哈哈,经常看到段落最后真情的呼吁,很亲切,但建议加1-2个就可以啦,克制一下感情啦😝
7.建议:例子是最好的凑字数利器,如果用个再具体一点的例子(虽然基本靠编),不仅会增加可信度,方便进行论证,也会给人代入感更强哦
 
2017-11-03 23:45
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评论 1 楼: (捂脸)刚发出去今天的作业才看到你的评语,有些问题我只能私下再改了,确实,感觉我的衔接词用的不好,搞得很多都突兀,刚刚规整作文的时候自己都尴尬。嘻嘻嘻谢谢你呀~辛苦啦辛苦啦~
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Assignment 1[br]例如,我的父母如果有时间就会出国旅行,去了很多很远的地方。而我的外婆由于身体原因,无法承受长距离飞行,即使有时间旅游,也只会选择在一些距离较近的地方。[br]Assignment 2[br]其次,出国旅游需要好的身体。出国旅游虽然很好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。并且大多都需要乘坐飞机,年纪大的人由于身体原因,无法承受长时间飞行,而年轻人则不用考虑这种问题。我的父母如果有时间就会出国旅行,去了很多很远的地方。而我的外婆虽然也很喜欢旅行,但由于心脏病只能选择一些距离较近的地方,并且老年人也不适合长时间走路。我自己很喜欢尝试那些刺激的活动,如果年轻的时候有机会就要去多多尝试,如果等到年纪大了,身体状况就无法承受高强度的活动了,所以我更喜欢年轻的时候出国旅游。[br]Assignment 3[br]Although traveling abroad is of great fun, it will consume physical strengths and energies.[br]Interesting as it is, traveling abroad will need consumption of physical strengths and energies.[br]Assignment 4[br]Secondly, traveling abroad requires good health. Interesting as it is, traveling abroad will need consumption of physical strengths and energies. In most situations, we have to go by plane. However, old people can’t stand a long flight due to their physical conditions. While young people don’t need to consider this problem. For example. My parents prefer traveling overseas when they have time and they had been gone to lots of countries even they are far from my home. In contrast, my grandma can only choose places near her place because of heart disease and failing to walk for a long time although she also like to go to far places. Personally, I’d like to try something exciting. If you have a chance to engage new things, just grab it. Otherwise, you can’t afford high intensity activities when you are older. That’s why I choose to travel abroad when I am young.
【作业一】[br]出国旅游一般需要坐很长时间的飞机和汽车,路途遥远,过程辛苦,会花费很多的精力和体力。去年暑假,我们和奶奶一起去欧洲玩,奶奶的腿走一会儿就累了,经常需要休息,之后的几天,她就经常在酒店周围转转。[br]【作业二】[br]其次,到国外旅游需要健康的身体。出国旅游可以让我们享受视听盛宴,但是长途跋涉,路途坎坷,常常会花费很多的精力和体力。举个例子,去年暑假我们和奶奶一起去欧洲玩,长时间的飞机让奶奶很疲惫,路程稍长,奶奶的腿就会犯困,经常需要休息,之后的几天,她就经常在酒店周围转转,小范围欣赏一下风土人情。而我每天都去参观不同的景点,回来给奶奶看照片并进行讲解。因此出国旅游对身体是一场巨大的考验,我们要趁年轻去旅行。[br]【作业三】[br]请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。[br]1.Although A be of great fun, it will consume B and C.[br]2.Interesting as it is, A will need consumption of B and C.[br]1.Although traveling abroad is of great fun, it will consume physical and mental energy.[br]2.Interesting as it, traveling abroad will need consumption of physical and mental energy. [br]【作业四】[br]请将你在作业二中写的理由段翻译成英文。[br]In addition, good health is the foundation of traveling abroad. There is no doubt that traveling abroad is nothing but a visual feast. However, it takes too much physical and mental energy so that not everyone could feel up to such a long journey especially for old people. Take my grandma for instance, we had a short-time trip last summer holiday, but her leg often felt sleepy as long as the distance got a little longer.Thus, her range of activities were confined to the surrounding of the hotel next several days while I spend a large amount of time to visit places of interest and introduced the scenes to her everyday. Thus, traveling abroad is a severe trial for our body and we should traveling across the world when we are young.[br]
【作业一】[br]为什么出国旅游需要好的身体,请举出一个相关的例子。[br]今年夏天,我和导师去美国开会,正好有一天的空闲时间去玩。由于他之前得过癌症,刚看了二三个风景,太毫无力气了,只能回酒店休息,而和其他同学所有想去的都去了,老师充满羡慕的表情。[br]【作业二】[br]请结合观点、理由,以及你写的例子,仿照上述理由段重写一个理由段,说明为什么出国旅游需要好的身体。[br]其次,出国旅游需要好的身体。出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。身体是革命的本钱,没有好的身体,无法享受旅游的乐。今年夏天,我和导师去美国开会,正好有一天的空闲出去玩。由于年龄大了,刚看了一两出风景,就毫无力气了,最后只能回酒店休息,老师充满遗憾的表情,而我把所有想去的去了。年龄大了,各项体能都跟不上了,像出国旅游这样需要很轻体力的活动很难完成,无法体味到旅游的乐趣,所以旅游要趁年轻。[br]【作业三】[br]请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。[br]1, Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume physical strength and energy.[br]2, Interesting as it is, travelling abroad will need consumption of physical strength and energy.[br]【作业四】[br]Secondly, travelling abroad needs a good physical condition.Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume physical strength and energy. The body is the capital of revolution, there is no way to enjoy travelling without health. In this summer, we have a chance to travel for one day during the meeting in America. Because of the age,my tutor was exhausted after going even two places and had to go back to hotel with an expression of disappointment on his face. However, I could enjoy what I hungered for. Take the body of old with weak physical condition into consideration, it is very hard to enjoy the activities which required much energy like travelling abroad. So, we had better travel to foreign countries when we are young.[br]
[br]【作业一】[br]为什么出国旅游需要好的身体,请举出一个相关的例子。[br]去年去了斯里兰卡,一路上需要做长达7.8个小时的飞机,并且由于旅游地点的原因需要长时间做汽车,当时旅游团里年龄稍微大一些的都在抱怨这次行程的辛苦,对于他们而言,由于身体和精力原因可能难以充分享受旅程。[br]【作业二】[br]请结合观点、理由,以及你写的例子,仿照上述理由段重写一个理由段,说明为什么出国旅游需要好的身体。[br]另外,年纪大一点的人身体状况和精力不如年轻人,而出国旅游往往伴随着长时间的乘坐各种交通工具的时间,这样的话身体可能都吃不消。去年去了斯里兰卡,一路上需要做长达7.8个小时的飞机,并且由于旅游地点的原因需要长时间做汽车,当时旅游团里年龄稍微大一些的都在抱怨这次行程的辛苦,对于他们而言,由于身体和精力原因可能难以充分享受旅程,有时还要承担身体出问题的风险。而在这方面,我想,年轻人能更好的适应并且很好得享受这个过程。[br]【作业三】。[br]请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。[br]1.Although A be of great fun, it will consume B and C.[br]2.Interesting as it is, A will need consumption of B and C.[br]Although traveling is of great fun, it will consume physical strength and energy.[br]Interesting as it is, traveling will need snsumption of physical strength and energy.[br]【作业四】[br]请将你在作业二中写的理由段翻译成英文。[br]Additionally, as for older people, their physical condition is not as good as the young’s, that means the older people are too weak to stand staying on the planet for a long time; while going abroad are always accompanied with long journey. Last year, I went to Sri Lanka to take my vacation, spent a whole night at plane and can hardly sleep well. Most of the older people, traveling with me, complained about the situation and some of them felt uncomfortable. In fact, too much consumption of energy can lead the old people to a dangerous situation. From this aspect, I think, the youth will totally adapt to any change and enjoy the whole process.

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