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#托福作文咩第 28 期 Day 2# 【作业一】
出国旅游一般都是乘坐飞机,往往都会占用一天时间使人非常疲惫。比如,北京飞到纽约最快也要13个半小时。长时间在飞行状态,坐在狭小密闭的空间里,会令人腰酸背痛,产生烦闷。如果身体好的话,实行这种情况的能力便强很多。
【作业二】
出国旅游需要好的身体。因为路途遥远舟车劳顿,十分辛苦,身体好的人适应力强,不容易导致那么疲惫,而且睡一觉就能很快恢复体力。出国旅游一般都是乘坐飞机,往往都会占用一天时间使人非常疲惫。比如,北京飞到纽约最快也要13个半小时。长时间在飞行状态,坐在狭小密闭的空间里,会令人腰酸背痛,产生烦闷。如果身体好的话,适应这种情况的能力便强很多。
【作业三】
请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。
1.Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy and strength.
2.Interesting as it is, travelling abroad will need consumption of energy and strength.
【作业四】
It is necessary to have a vigorous body for travelling abroad. In terms of the long distance, our bodies and spirits suffer a lot. A man who has a strong body is able to adapt to this condition. It is not that easy to make him feel tired, and having a sweet dream is the best way to refresh that kind of people. People usually fly to foreign countries, and it costs the whole day on the way which drains strength very much. For example, it takes 13.5 hours at least to fly to the New York city from Beijing. Body will ache when people are stucked in thier narrow seats for a long time. But if the body is firm enough, there is no doubt to get out of the dilimma easily. Although travelling abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy and strength. So I insist that travel abroad as soon as possible!
2017-10-31 22:51:45 来自 托福作文咩
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sorry,来晚了,不过这段感觉好像评论过,怎么我的评论不见了,😟不会评到别人作文的底下的了吧(捂脸
1. A man who has a strong body is able to adapt to this condition.这句话出现的有点突兀,可以加个连接词让过渡更自然(e.g.However, Nevertheless, etc.)
2.第3.4句:人称的转换好像出了点问题,就是一开始是a man,到后面又出现了that kind of people,建议统一下人称
3.第5句:“People usually fly to foreign countries...”突然出现在这里会显得有点生硬,因为这里的坐飞机劳累和前面的旅途劳累不是包含关系嘛,所以建议加个连接词过渡一下(e.g.:especially when..., in particular, etc.)
4.第7句:Body will ache这个表达是不是有点怪怪的,身体会疼痛,emmm,我想想,这句换成这样表达好不好:When people are stucked in thier narrow seats for a long time, they will easily get a backache.(用词有点简单
5.第8句:delimma大多数情况下一般指的是“进退两难”的意思,放在这里稍稍有点不太合适
6.哈哈,经常看到段落最后真情的呼吁,很亲切,但建议加1-2个就可以啦,克制一下感情啦😝
7.建议:例子是最好的凑字数利器,如果用个再具体一点的例子(虽然基本靠编),不仅会增加可信度,方便进行论证,也会给人代入感更强哦
 
2017-11-03 23:45
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评论 1 楼: (捂脸)刚发出去今天的作业才看到你的评语,有些问题我只能私下再改了,确实,感觉我的衔接词用的不好,搞得很多都突兀,刚刚规整作文的时候自己都尴尬。嘻嘻嘻谢谢你呀~辛苦啦辛苦啦~
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1.去年夏天,我们一家人一起去法国旅行,经过几个小时的飞机,到达目的地时候年长的叔叔就已经困得不行。在后面的几天旅行中,我们爬山,观景,叔叔也只是在第一天玩的还算尽兴,到后面几天体力就跟不上。第三天时候我们坐在缆车上四处观赏风景,叔叔在旁边睡着了,完全没有精力去看风景。[br]2.出国旅游需要好的身体。只有身体好,有足够的体力和精力,我们才能玩的更尽兴。去年夏天,我们一家人一起去法国旅行,经过几个小时的飞机,到达目的地时候年长的叔叔就已经困得不行。在后面的几天旅行中,我们爬山,观景,叔叔也只是在第一天玩的还算尽兴,到后面几天体力就跟不上。第三天时候我们坐在缆车上四处观赏风景,叔叔在旁边睡着了,完全没有精力去看风景。年轻的时候可以多出去走走,多去体验一下不同的经历,而到年老的时候在出国,可能身体无法承受。因此年轻的时候出国旅游最好。[br]3. 1.Although traveling abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy and strength.[br] 2.Interesting as it is, travling abroad will need consumption of energy and strength.[br]4. Traveling abroad needs a healthy body. Only in good shape, can we have enough energy and strength to have fun. Last summer, our whole families went to France to have a vacation. After several hours traveling on the plane, my elder uncle was pretty sleepy when we arrived at the destination. And at the first day of the trip, he could enjoy it, but his rest traveling got absolutely spoiled due to the lack of energy. On the way, we climbed the mountain, enjoyed the beautiful sceneries, swimming,etc. Instead, my uncle was too tired to do anything but was asleep along the way. Young age can provide us more energy and chances to travel abroad and to have various experiences.On the contrary, we might have no energy and strength to go abroad. Thus, it is better for us traveling abroad when we are young.
【作业一】[br]去年,奶奶去欧洲玩,每天都要参观一个国家,因为国家之间有一定的路程,所以每天有几乎花一半时间花在坐飞机,做大巴这样交通工具上。因为奶奶年纪大了,体力没有年轻时好了。因为旅途的颠簸和紧张的行程,我奶奶回国后就大病一场。。[br]【作业二】[br]其次,出国旅行需要好的身体。一般去出国旅行,行程会安排的很满,没有好的身体不能顺利完成旅行。年轻时体力好,可以承受长途的交通和游玩消耗的体力,但是年纪大了很可能在旅行中出现身体问题。去年,奶奶去欧洲玩,每天都要参观一个国家,因为国家之间有一定的路程,所以每天有几乎花一半时间花在坐飞机,做大巴这样交通工具上。因为奶奶年纪大了,体力没有年轻时好了。因为旅途的颠簸和紧张的行程,我奶奶回国后就大病一场。因为我我的梦想是可以在每个国家旅游,这需要耗费很大的精力和体力。我认为年轻人体力好这个梦想很容易实现,要是等我老了再去实现,恐怕身体会难以承受。所以,我更喜欢年轻时出国旅游。[br]【作业三】[br]1 Although traveling in abroad is of great fun, it will consume energy no matter in physical and mental.[br]2 Interesting as it is, traveling in abroad will need concemption of physical and mental energy.[br]【作业四】[br]Besides, a energy body is necessary for traveling in othercountry. Generally, there are lots of viev sites in the trivaling list that we plant to visit. So a strong body is really important. The youngery can more likely to endur this full trip than order. Because the older people always have several problems in their health, accordingly they may ill aftere the trip. Last year, my grandma toke part in a trip to visiting 8 country in Europe. Although the senery is of great fun, it was consume physical and mental energy. Because of the full list and heavy translation, finally, my grandmother got a serious illness aftere this trip. For me, a young girl, whose dream is to travel the whole countries in the world. I believe it is easy to be achive my dream when I am yong, and I can't think I have a healthy body to let the dream run forty years later. Thus, I wold like to have a trip when I am a yong girl.
【作业一】[br]有一年,我的表姐带她的奶奶去美国玩,他们坐了十一个小时的飞机,然后她奶奶的身体已经开始不舒服了,到了美国,他们每天的日程都排的很紧,要走很多的路,她奶奶感觉很累,所以就只能每天陪她逛逛附近然后回宾馆休息[br]【作业二】[br]其次,出国旅游需要好的身体,出国游玩虽然是一件很有意思的事,但是却也非常耗费体力,如果年老了再出国,就会感到体力不够,不能够玩的很痛快。比如有一年,我的表姐带她的奶奶去美国玩,他们坐了十一个小时的飞机,然后她奶奶的身体已经开始不舒服了,到了美国,他们每天的日程都排的很紧,要走很多的路,她奶奶感觉很累,所以就只能每天陪她逛逛附近然后回宾馆休息。所以我们应该在年轻有活力的时候出去玩,可以更好的享受出国有玩的乐趣。[br]【作业三】[br]请分别用下列句型翻译这句话:出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。[br]1.Although A be of great fun, it will consume B and C.[br]2.Interesting as it is, A will need consumption of B and C.[br]although travel abroad is of great fun,it will consume our physical and energy.[br]interesting as it is,travel abroad will need consumption of physical and energy.[br]【作业四】[br]Besides,travel to foreign countries needs a good health.Although travel abroad is of great fun,it will consume our physical and energy.If we tavel to foreign countries when we are older,we will feel tired and cannot enjoy ourselves.For example,last year,my cousin go to Amercia with her grandmother.They spent eleven hours on the plane,and after arriving at Amercia,their schedule was very close.After a few days,her grandmother felt very tired,so she can just travel with my cousin for a half day and then rest in the hotel.So we should travel to foreign countries when we are young and have a lot of energy,in this way we can have much fun and enjoy ourself.
1.今年年初的时候全家一起去越南旅游,可是我的父亲因为常年膝盖受损的原因,无法下海与我们一起玩水。所以在我们玩的时候他只能坐在岸边的椅子上静静的看着我们。[br]2.我认为出国旅游,需要良好的身体素质条件。出国旅游虽然好玩儿,但是也很耗费体力和精力。年轻人的体力相对与长辈们来说,往往更好一些。今年年初的时候全家一起去越南旅游,可是我的父亲因为常年膝盖受损的原因,无法下海与我们一起玩水。所以在我们玩的时候他只能坐在岸边的椅子上静静的看着我们。就我个人而言,我更喜爱一些户外的探险活动,但是这些活动需要耗费足够的精力。如果年老的时候再想去从事这些,那也已经是力不从心了,所以我更喜欢年轻的时候出国旅游。[br]3.1 Although outbound tourism is of great fun, it will consume physical strength and energy.[br]3.2 Interesting as it is, outbound tourism will need consumption of physical strength and energy.[br]4.In my opinion, healthy body is good at outbound tourism. Although outbound tourism is of great fun, it will consume physical strength and energy. Younger people's physical strength is better than older people. In the beginning of this year, my family went to Vietnam. My father has problem about his knees, so he can't playing in the sea with us. He was only to sat in the outside and looked us along. Personally, I prefer to some outdoor adventure activities, but all of these need enough energy. If we are think about these when we are older, not enough energy we can used. So I prefer travel to foreign countries when I am young. [br]

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